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Tuesday 23 June 2015

Once upon a time there was a girl called Shina. She had long blonde hair and and blue eyes that sparkled in the sun light. But for some reason everybody made fun of Shina. So one warm day she sailed to a island that no one had ever been to it was called pidfort island she went with a lot of food and water and clothes. She built a little cabin for herself. The next day everyone in the village was wondering where she was because they were ready to make fun of her. So they spent a few hours looking for but they still couldn't find her so they just gave up on it. The next day a clown with lots of warts on his face dark skin and curly hair came into the town he said his name was Eddy. Eddy said that he knew how to get Shina to come back. But only if you let me live in this beautiful village. The people said yes so Eddy told them that if they fished for lots and lots of fish and sprinkled this dust on them . Put them in a boat and sail them to pidfort island. So they did as they were told . The next day they all gathered into the town square and then Eddy explained to them what they need to do next. You just have to wait with your heads out the window and she will soon return so everyone ran to there houses and stuck their heads out the window and waited while  Shina was feeding the swans she saw the boat until she saw all the dead fish in the boat but some of them were alive so she tipped the boat over to let all the fish free. Then she sailed back to her cabin to get some lunch . Back at the village Eddy was going into every ones house and pushing them out the window. He ran to the other side of the village where nobody lived. Meanwhile Shina was making herself feel realy like home. At the village nobody new where Eddy was so they all forgot about him and Shina and just got on with their lives. So Eddy and Shina were never seen again.                    
                                                                                                                                                              
THE END.

1 comment:

  1. That is an interesting story Billie. I liked how you described Shina and Eddy - I could picture them in my head. Let's look at where we could use some commas in your writing.

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